million dallors are just too much for me... haha

2012-08-21 · 첨삭 강사 Jehann

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If I had a million dollars and had to spend it all in one day, I would travel around the world alone, eat delicious foods from famous chefs, go to the Mediterranean, and buy a brand new computer. First, I might be more brave, and wise than I was before while traveling the world alone because I would meet many people, experience various cultures, eat delicious dishes that are from different countries, and be have to solve problems I will be facing on my own. Second, I feel satisfied when I taste differnet dishes. Especially, if it is from famous chefs, I would really like to try their dishes with a million dollars. Third, i would see the beautiful nature of the Mediterranean enjoying my trip. Also, swimming in the Mediterranean was on my wish list. lastly, I would buy the newest computer to access information easily to do my assignments, and also enjoy my free times through watching movies, doing computer games, and reading books on-line.

강사 첨삭

Hi! [이름]! Thanks for doing your homework! good job! I wish I could go with you..hahaha...anyway, I will see you in class. take care ----T. Jehann-----   If I had a million dollars and had to spend it all in one day, I would travel around the world alone, eat delicious foods from famous chefs, go to the Mediterranean, and buy a brand new computer. >>>COrrect!  **Wow! Can I go with you?haha**First, I might be more brave, and wise than I was before while traveling the world alone because >>>COrrect!  I would meet many people, experience various cultures, eat delicious dishes that are from >>>COrrect! different countries, and be have to solve problems I will be facing on my own. >>>different countries,and solve problems I will be facing on my own.Second, I feel satisfied when I taste differnet dishes. Especially, if it is from famous chefs, I would really like to try their dishes with a million dollars.>>>COrrect!Third, i would see the beautiful nature of the Mediterranean enjoying my trip. >>>COrrect!**make sure you capitalize the word \"I\"  Also, swimming in the Mediterranean was on my wish list. >>>COrrect!lastly, I would buy the newest computer to access information easily to do my assignments, and also enjoy my free times through watching movies, doing computer games, and reading books on-line. >>>COrrect! **make sure you capitalize the first word of your sentence as in the word \"lastly\"

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