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2010-09-28 · 첨삭 강사 Dona

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I spent my time to train mind meditation for Chuseok holidays(7 nights 8 days). I belonged to 3rd level of 8. 3rd level needs to spend 2 weeks at least to have certificate. If I spend 2 weeks 3rd level at headquater of mind meditation academy, I will be asked to pass 3rd level. If I train my mind through correct method, I can talk corret answer, which is the enlightenment of truth. It is so amazing. The people who pass each level can't help saying same answer for each level test. If someone said a wrong answer, they didn't realize their enlightenment of truth. So they have to throw away more their own life memory that they have lived and experienced. The method of 3rd level is to throw away my body in detail in my mind.For example, Demon pull out my eyes from my skull by using knife.

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I am really amazed with your dedication and love for the things that you do Nicky.

So to help you better express yourself about meditation, here are some grammar pointers you need to know.

Thanks you for drafting this one.

Keep writing.

>>Teacher Donna

I spent my time to train mind meditation for Chuseok holidays(7 nights 8 days).

>> I spent my time to train with the Mind Meditation Academy during Chuseok holidays for 7 nights and 8 days.

I belonged to 3rd level of 8.

>> I belong to 3rd level of 8.

 3rd level needs to spend 2 weeks at least to have certificate.

>>The third level needs to spend 2 weeks at least to have certificate.

If I spend 2 weeks 3rd level at headquater of mind meditation academy, I will be asked to pass 3rd level.

>> If I spend 2 weeks in the 3rd level at the headquarters of mind meditation academy, I will be asked to pass the 3rd level.

If I train my mind through correct method, I can talk corret answer, which is the enlightenment of truth.

>> If I train my mind through correct method, I can talk about a correct answer which is the enlightenment of truth.

It is so amazing.

>>Correct.

The people who pass each level can't help saying same answer for each level test.

>> The people who pass each level can't help saying the same answer for each level test.

If someone said a wrong answer, they didn't realize their enlightenment of truth.

>> If someone said a wrong answer, s/he didn't realize his/her enlightenment of truth.

So they have to throw away more their own life memory that they have lived and experienced.

>>Correct.

The method of 3rd level is to throw away my body in detail in my mind.

>>Correct

For example, Demon pull out my eyes from my skull by using knife.

>> For example, the demon pulls out my eyes from my skull by using knife.

 

 

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