Mission statement of HYT salses
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Date : 11, April, 2024
To : All members of Sales Division
Cc : Mr. [Name] : Mission statement of HYT salses
Hello, I\'m JinTae Lee, new president of HYT sales.
I’m giving you our mission statement for this month.
This month sales goal is to exceed $1M.
It’s not hard mission, although this month is not peak season.
Although, last year same month, we achieved $0.9M sales, but now we have more clients than last year.
thank you for your cooperation in advance.
[이름] LEE, president of HYT Sales Division.
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Date : 11, April, 2024
>>CORRECT
To : All members of Sales Division
>>To: All members of the Sales Division
Cc : Mr. [Name]
>>CORRECT
Subject : Mission statement of HYT salses
>>Subject: Mission Statement of HYT Sales
>> Dear Team,
I am [Name] Lee, the new president of HYT Sales.
>> I am excited to share our mission statement for this month with you.
>> Our sales goal for this month is to exceed $1 million.
>> While this may seem like a challenging mission, especially considering it\'s not the peak season, I believe it is achievable.
>> Compared to the same month last year when we achieved $0.9 million in sales, we now have a larger client base, which gives us a strong foundation to reach and exceed our target.
>> Thank you in advance for your cooperation and dedication to making this mission a success.
[이름] LEE, president of HYT Sales Division.
>> Best regards,
[이름] Lee
President, HYT Sales Division
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