Modes of transportation
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The improvement for Task 1 practice is consistent.
I hope you can maintain this level.
Take note of the corrections below.
Make sure to write in general terms when discussing facts.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
The given chart illustrate how many percentage of commuters used four modes of transportation in three different years.
>> The given graph illustrates the percentage of commuters using four modes of transportation in three different years.
In this table, people can see which mode of transportation was poplar and how many the percentages were increased or decreased in these period.
>> In this graph, people can see which mode of transportation was popular and how much the percentages increased or decreased in certain periods.
The interesting point of this graph is that the most popular mode of transportation was different in the every year.
>>The interesting point in this graph is that the most popular mode of transportation was different every year.
Train was popular in 1980 with around 27 percentage, car was popular in 2000 with over 35 percentage and tube and bus were popular in 1960 with over 25 and 35 percentage respectively.
>> Trains were popular in 1980 with around 27 percent of the commuters, cars were popular in 2000 with over 35 percent and tubes and buses were popular in 1960 with over 25 and 35 percent respectively.
The percentage of car was risen dramatically from 7 percentage to 37 percentage, while the bus’s was dropped from 38 percentage to 15 percentage during the period.
>> The percentage of commuters using a car had risen dramatically from 7 percent to 37 percent, while the percentage of commuters for buses dropped from 38 percent to 15 percent during the same period.
It shows the information that the people preferred to use cars for commuting than bus as time went by.
>> It shows the information that people preferred to use cars for commuting than buses as time goes by.
Lastly, train and tube were used regularly because the percentages were not changed a lot during the years.
>> Lastly, trains and tubes were used regularly because the percentages had not changed a lot over the years.
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