Momo land's performance and library event

2017-05-25 · 첨삭 강사 Dianne

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Yesterday,Momo Land come to my school to show off their talent and advertise games.I saw Momo Land at the second line.They are really cute but not very pretty.They played for 25minutes.Today was library festival day.I participated the event and I got a candy and chocolate bar.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!


Wow! This is good news.

I think this experience is exciting.

I hope that you enjoyed Momo Land\'s show in your school.

Have a great day ahead and an exciting weekend!


_Teacher Dianne ^_^


Yesterday,Momo Land come to my school to show off their talent and advertise games.

>> Yesterday, Momo Land came to our school to show off their talent and advertise games.

I saw Momo Land at the second line.

>> correct

They are really cute, but not very pretty.

>> correct

They played for 25 minutes.

>> correct

Today was library festival day.

>> Today was the Library Festival Day.

I participated the event and I got a candy and chocolate bar.

>> I participated in the event and I got a candy and a chocolate bar.

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