Monday homework

2021-03-15 · 첨삭 강사 Sheila

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Q:What do you think are the advantages of being a king? A:I think the advantages of being king is king has many power and he can make a rule. First, if a person have a power then he or she can do almost everything that he or she want to do. Second, if a person can make a rule then if the person is wise then the country will very peaceful and good to live. Last, if a person can make a rule then he or she can make a rule that is very beneficial to him or her. But I think it\'s not a good idea.

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름]! Great job! You are getting better and better with your grammar. 

~Teacher Sheila


I think the advantages of being king is king has many power and he can make a rule.
>>I think the advantages of being king is the king has many powers and he can make a rule.

First, if a person have a power then he or she can do almost everything that he or she want to do.
>>First, if a person has a power then he or she can do almost everything that he or she wants to do. 

Second, if a person can make a rule then if the person is wise then the country will very peaceful and good to live.
>>Second, if a person is wife and can make a rule then the country will be very peaceful and good to live.

Last, if a person can make a rule then he or she can make a rule that is very beneficial to him or her.
>>CORRECT

But I think it\'s not a good idea.
>>CORRECT

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