Monday Homework & Wednesday Homework
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Claire\'s homework
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Hello Claire!
Thank you for your hard work this week. Keep it up! ^^
~~Teacher Kate
MONDAY HOMEWORK:
I think not all money is the root of evils when we use them for the good way.
>>I think not all money is the root of evils when we use them in a good way.
There is so much spender in the world. Most people spend money for their life.
>>There are so many spenders in the world. Most people spend money to live.
For example foods, clothes, children, house. These are the usual things many people spends money on.
>>For example foods, clothes, children, and house. These are the usual things many people spend money on.
These are the usual examples. People work hard and the money is a reward for the hard work.
>>CORRECT!
But some people has a lot of money and they spends there money for alcohol drinks, gambling.
>>But some people have a lot of money and they spend their money for alcoholic drinks and gambling.
Luckily not all millionaires are do the bad things. Bill Gates is a famous good millionaire to remember.
>>Luckily not all millionaires do bad things. Bill Gates is a famous and a good example of a millionaire to remember.
He donated almost his money and help poor people. If many people become rich, many people can become the bad rich.
>>He donated most of his money to help poor people. If many people become rich, many people can become bad.
I think that’s true. So I think being rich can be fun for a moment, but it could be a nightmare at the same time.
>>CORRECT!
WEDNESDAY HOMEWORK:
I want to meet unicorn with rainbow in real life.
>>I want to meet a rainbow unicorn in real life.
I always want to see the unicorn in real life but I only saw in the story book.
>>I\'ve always wanted to see a unicorn in real life but I\'ve only seen them in story books.
Many children’s dream is meet the unicorn and I’m the same with them.
>>Many children’s dream is to meet a unicorn and I’m the same with them.
Unicorn is every kids dream I think. And that’s true.
>>Unicorns are in every kids dream I think. And that’s true.
I wonder there is the person who hate unicorn in the world.
>>I wonder if there are any people who hate unicorns in the world.
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