money and kids
학생이 쓴 원문
We had experienced some difficult historical situation in Korea like invasion of China and Japan, Korean War, colonial period etc.
Traditionally we have regarded education as the most important factor in survival.
Education gives us the chance to get good jobs and become rich.
Of course social culture and structure are not mature.
We are spending to raise capable and personal person not to raise civilian.
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon, Ms. [이름]!
Good point! Thank you for sharing your thought.
Here in my country, we regard education as the best inheritance a parent can give to their children. A family may not be rich but once they are able to send their children to school and finish their degree, it is one of the best achievement that a parent could have.
Take care!
Aki~
We had experienced some difficult historical situation in Korea like invasion of China and Japan, Korean War, colonial period etc.
>>> We had experienced some difficult historical situations in Korea like the invasion of China and Japan, the Korean War, the colonial period, etc.
Traditionally we have regarded education as the most important factor in survival.
>>> CORRECT!
Education gives us the chance to get good jobs and become rich.
>>> CORRECT!
Of course, social culture and structure are not mature.
>>> CORRECT!
We are spending to raise capable and personal person not to raise civilian.
>>> We are spending to raise capable and responsible people not to raise civilians.
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