Money can't buy happiness
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Frankly speaking, I agree with it a little bit that money can buy happiness.
>>Frankly speaking, I agree that money can buy happiness.
Many people think that they would be happy if they had a lot of money.
>>Many people think that they would be happy if they have a lot of money.
I have dreamed that I won a lottery many times and I have imagined what I would buy, how much money I would share to my family and which apartment I would purchase.
>>I dreamt of winning the lottery many times. I had imagined what I would buy, how much money I would share to my family, and which apartment I would purchase in case I will really win.
Money is really related with all people\'s life.
>>Money is always needed by people./ We all need money.
All we need is being happy.
>> But for me, all we need is to stay happy.
However, the more people want to have money, the more people be greedy.
>>On the other hand, the more people want money, the more they become greedy.
I think we are able to be happy with the minimum money that people can eat, wear and sleep.
>>I think we can be able to stay happy with a minimum amount of money as long as we can eat, wear something and sleep.
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