Money can't buy happiness

2018-09-17 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Hello Jenny! I think 'Happy' is very important in my life. And I'm happy person. Because I'm smiling always. But I'm not rich. Just normal. Recently I read article, that topic is about the rich person. He has a lot of money in Korea. But he went to jail. And he always have a problem. I think he have a lot of stress. If money can buy happiness, he is very happy person. But he isn't So money can't buy happiness. Finally I want happy all of my people!

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Hello Jenny!
>>correct
I think \'Happy\' is very important in my life.

>>I think \'Happiness\' is very important in my life.
 And I\'m happy person. Because I\'m smiling always.

>>I am a happy person because I always smile.
 But I\'m not rich. Just normal.

>>But I\'m not rich, I\'m just a normal person.
 Recently I read article, that topic is about the rich person. 

>>Recently, I read an article about a rich person. 
 He has a lot of money in Korea.

>>correct
 But he went to jail. And he always have a problem. 

>>But he went to jail and he always has a problem.
 I think he have a lot of stress. 

>> I think he has a lot of stress. 
 If money can buy happiness, he is very happy person. Be he isn\'t

>>If money can buy happiness, he would be a happy person but he isn\'t.
 So money can\'t buy happiness.

>>correct

Finally I want happy all of my people!

>>Thus I want everybody to be happy.


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