Money, fame and success
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Good afternoon Lion!
As always, you impressed me with your answer.
It\'s noticeable how much thoughts you put into it.
You made sure that your opinion on both side were presented.
See you tonight!
Amanda ^&^
I agree that money and fame are important part of success. But those are not synonym.
>> I agree that money and fame are important parts of success, however they are not synonymous.
Let\'s talk about success first.
>> Correct
I want to define that success is to achieve what people would want to get.
>> My definition of success is when people achieve their goals.
If someone wants to be a singer, and he or she did it! That`s success of him or her.
>> If someone wants to be a singer and he or she becomes one, that\'s considered a success for him or her.
If someone wants to run fastest in the world, and accomplished it. That`s success too.
>> If someone wants to be the fastest runner in the world and accomplished it. That\'s a success too.
We can move on money, fame. You can make lots of money.
>> You can make lots of money and live your life in fame and luxury.
If making lots of money is your goal, and you made it, It can be defined success.
>> If making lots of money is your goal and you did it, it can be defined as success.
But You achieve something else. and money just followed up, making money was not your goal. So money can be said to success.
>> But if having lots of money is not your goal, then you wont consider it as success.
What I want to say is money, fame, being respect or being loved can be part of success. But Those are not success itself.
>> What I want to say is money, fame, being respected or being loved can be parts of success, but they don\'t define success itself.
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