Money is a useful tool to live happily.
학생이 쓴 원문
Even if I agree on people’s opinion that money cannot buy happiness, I don’t think that I can be truly happy without any money. Money can help us to find the way that we can be happy. Money is definitely needed for people’s happiness. Because we are living in a capitalist society, we can’t do anything without money. When we spend time with people who we love, or we want to go to travel to anywhere, or we enjoy our hobby, money can be a useful tool and make us more positive and make us to live happily.
강사 첨삭
Hi June! Thanks for spending a little of your time with your homework. I really appreciate it! ^ ^
I would definitely agree with you. I think the \"money can\'t buy happiness\" is such an old adage. Having enough or even more than enough money can truly make us happy in a sense that it is a tool for you to obtain the things you desire. But just because you need it doesn\'t mean that you will revolve your world around it. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>CORRECT
Money can help us to find the way that we can be happy.
>>Money can help us find the way to be happy.
Money is definitely needed for people’s happiness.
>>CORRECT
Because we are living in a capitalist society, we can’t do anything without money.
>>CORRECT
When we spend time with people who we love, or we want to go to travel to anywhere, or we enjoy our hobby, money can be a useful tool and make us more positive and make us to live happily.
>>When we want to spend time with the people we love, like travel with them and enjoy our hobbies, money is very useful in obtaining these things.
>>Money can also give us positivity and we can live happily thinking that we have enough of it.
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