Money is most need thing

2022-01-22 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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If I were a born to be rich, my parents they are learning to me how to use moeny good well. But If I were a poor and suddenly to be rich, it\'s very dangerous. I don\'t know how to use money and I won\'t have any economic ideas either. Money is most need thing but if I don\'t have enough knowledge, really dangerous.

강사 첨삭

Hi Ann:) 

Yes, we need to be wise with handling money. It can be very powerful and controlling. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

If I were a born to be rich, my parents they are learning to me how to use moeny good well.
>> If I was born rich, my parents would teach me how to handle money well. 

But If I were a poor and suddenly to be rich, it\'s very dangerous.
>> But if I were poor, I would want to be rich which can be dangerous. 

I don\'t know how to use money and I won\'t have any economic ideas either.
>> I won\'t know how to properly use money and I won\'t have any economic ideas for myself. 

Money is most need thing but if I don\'t have enough knowledge, really dangerous.
>> Money is something that we need but if I don\'t have enough knowledge to handle it, it can be dangerous. 

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