Money is the root of all evil

2013-07-23 · 첨삭 강사 Kay

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I think it is.I agree with that.If people had too much money there life will be really bored,because they don't need to manage the money.People feel happy with manage the money but if is too much it doesn't.It will make people angry and arrogant and they will be fight for the money.We're life is not for money.We're life is for happy not money.Money is part of our life.There's a lot of things which is more important than money such as family,friends.Money is make people to poor.If some people doesn't have money other rich people ignore them.And then the will be getting angry and they wanted to fight against rich people.I think it's stupid.we don't need to fight.If poor people need money,then rich people can give some money for poor people.Money should be share with all people.Why people do crime?because they have no money.I think money is for share not for richest person.

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Hi [이름]!   Thank you for doing your homework!You are very hardworking and you deserve a good price for it! Just continue believing in yourself and you will be successful soon! I know that you are an industrious person, and I salute you for that! I will see you in class and I will share you about my favorite season.   T. Kay ^^   I think it is. >>Correct! I agree with that. >>Correct! If people had too much money there life will be really bored,because they don\'t need to manage the money.>>If people had too much money, their life will really be boring, because they don\'t need to manage their own money. People feel happy with manage the money but if is too much it doesn\'t. >>People feel happy with managing their money but if it is too much its not happy anymore. It will make people angry and arrogant and they will be fight for the money. >>It will make people get angry and arrogant and they will be fighting about money. We\'re life is not for money. >>We live if its not for money. We\'re life is for happy not money.>>We live for happiness and not for money. Money is part of our life. >>Correct! There\'s a lot of things which is more important than money such as family,friends.>>Correct! Money is make people to poor.>>Money tend to makes people poor. If some people doesn\'t have money other rich people ignore them.>>If some poeple do not have money, rich people tend to ignore them. And then the will be getting angry and they wanted to fight against rich people. >>And then they will get angry and want to fight against rich people. I think it\'s stupid.>>Correct! we don\'t need to fight.>>We don\'t need to fight. If poor people need money,then rich people can give some money for poor people.>>Correct! Money should be share with all people. >>Money should be shared with all people. Why people do crime?because they have no money.>>Why do people do crime? Because they have no money. I think money is for share not for richest person. >>I think money is to be shared and not only for the richest person.

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