money or happiness?

2014-01-10 · 첨삭 강사 May

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Some people says that if we don't have money, we probably can't alive. We always need money because we have to eat, buy and something to do. I also agree that money is very important for us. Sometimes I'm very irritated when my wallet is empty. If i don't have enough money, i won't buy what i need. But more important, i can get along with my friends except much money. I think friends, love, family such what we cannot seeing is more crucial than money.

강사 첨삭

Hello there, Bella!! ^_^ Thank you for doing your homework, dear. I agree with your answer! Yes, money is important. With money we can buy all the things that we need. But money can\'t buy happiness. Do you agree with that? ^_^ Well, I\'ll just see you later! Have a wonderful afternoon, Bella! Happy weekend! ~Teacher May   By the way, here are your corrections:   Some people says that if we don\'t have money, we probably can\'t alive. >> correct!We always need money because we have to eat, buy and something to do. >> We always need money because we have to eat, and buy all the necessary things for us. >>OR: We always need money because we have to buy food and all the necessary things that we need.I also agree that money is very important for us. >> correct!Sometimes I\'m very irritated when my wallet is empty. >> correct! >>OR: Sometimes I feel very irritated when my wallet is empty.If i don\'t have enough money, i won\'t buy what i need. >> If I don\'t have enough money, I can\'t buy what I need.But more important, i can get along with my friends except much money. >> But more important is that, I can get along with my friends even though I don\'t have much money.I think friends, love, family such what we cannot seeing is more crucial than money. >> I think friends, love one, and family are more important than money. >>OR: I think friendship, relationship with others and family are more important than money.

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