More and more people are finding it increasingly important to wear fashionable clothes. Is this atti
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Fashion items are the things which people are the most interested in. I think this is the basic desire for people being look nice to others. Clothes are one of the things that makes us unique, nice and beautiful. However, the price of clothes is much more expensive than it when I was teenager. It can be burden for parents because teenagers would like to look the best among their friends by showing off their items what they put on. Especially, the clothes of the famous brand is usually expensive and is popular from teenagers. We can see same clothes when we meet young people and we can\'t find any differences among students. They all look same. I think we can show ourselves with various items without expensive ones. I hope our society respect person\'s individuality more so it gives positive effect to people when they express themselves.
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Good morning Mr. [이름]~! ^^ I\'m always grateful when they\'re doing your essay. You have a lot of ideas in mind and I\'m always excited to read them. Stay improved! ^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Fashion items are the things which people are most interested in.
>>> CORRECT
I think this is the basic desire for people to look nice to others.
>>> CORRECT
Clothes are one of the things that makes us unique, nice and beautiful.
>>> CORRECT
However, the price of clothes is much more expensive than when I was a teenager.
>>> CORRECT
It can be burden for parents because teenagers would like to look the best among their friends by showing off their items what they put on.
>>> It can be a burden to parents because teenagers would like to look the best among their friends by showing off the items they put on.
Especially, the clothes of the famous brand is usually expensive and is popular for teenagers.
>>> CORRECT
We can see the same clothes when we meet young people and we can\'t find any differences among students.
>>> CORRECT
They all look the same.
>>> CORRECT
I think we can show ourselves with various items without expensive ones.
>>> CORRECT
I hope our society respect person\'s individuality more so it gives positive effect to people when they express themselves.
>>> CORRECT
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