More people live alone today than they did in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative
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I don\'t know if there is a positive point about living alone. We used to live all together with relative in same village or house before. Family is the most important factor in our life. However, people don\'t want to have a baby or think one is enough for parents these days because of the financial matter, quality of their life and burden of baby care. For personal, there are a lot of advantage living alone that they don\'t need to spend many time for other family members. So, they can have a chance to enjoy their life and improve themselves by doing something they like. But I have thought if nobody is not with me when I die. I am not sure if I can endure my feeling that would be lonely. I also would regret that I didn\'t have children because I think it is the most blessing for human. Children give me the best happy and teach adults to develop themselves. We will face the difficulties in the near future such as ageing society, the lack of young people and the individualism due to the th
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Good morning Mr. [이름] ~! ^^ I agree with your opinion. Anyone isn\'t happy being alone however, in your country many people, wouldn\'t want to get married and have a baby, it sounds peaceful on the other hand though. But it\'s their choice anyway. ^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I don\'t know if there is a positive point about living alone.
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We used to live all together with relative in same village or house before.
>>> We used to live together with our relatives in the same village or house before.
Family is the most important factor in our life.
>>> CORRECT
However, people don\'t want to have a baby or think one is enough for parents these days because of financial matters, quality of their life and burden of baby care.
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For personal, there are a lot of advantages living alone that they don\'t need to spend many times for other family members.
>>> CORRECT
So, they can have a chance to enjoy their life and improve themselves by doing something they like.
>>> CORRECT
But I have thought if nobody is not with me when I die.
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I am not sure if I can endure my feelings that would be lonely.
>>> I am not sure if I can endure my loneliness.
I also would regret that I didn\'t have children because I think it is the most precious blessings for human.
>>> CORRECT
Children give me the best happy and teach adults to develop themselves.
>>> Children give me happiness and teach adults to develop themselves.
We will face the difficulties in the near future such as aging society, the lack of young people and the individualism due to the...
>>> CORRECT
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