More time or more money?

2016-12-07 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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Whether use money to make a money or earn the money to use a money, that is question. All people needs a money. And so all people works to make a money. To make a money well is to use a money. But some people doesn't use money. They save only the money. I think they don't know the value of the money. The money must circulate. And the money spend by the people. That is a economy. But some people are just to collect a money, never use it. They have no time to spend money. I think all people make a money in order to use a money. To use a money need a time. Human being should have a free time, and are incerasing the efficiency of work. More time or more money? That is matter of balance. Those who save only the money could be workaholic. People should use the money well, and take a time to think and play. Finally, the balance of time and money is very important.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Sir!
For those people you mentioned who only save their money, for what are they saving it for? And who are these people? I don\'t know anybody like that around me. I guess, they have a lot of money then. But when they finally have time to use it, it might be too late. I mean, we work to earn so that we could enjoy life, right?
Take care!
~T. Lynn
Whether use money to make a money or earn the money to use a money, that is question.
>> Whether to use money to make money or earn money to use money, that is the question.
All people needs a money.
>> All people need money.
And so all people works to make a money.
>> And so all people work to make money.
To make a money well is to use a money.
>> To make money well is to use money.
But some people doesn\'t use money.
>> But some people don\'t use money.
They save only the money.
>> They only save money.
I think they don\'t know the value of the money.
>> correct!
The money must circulate.
>> correct!
OR>> Money must circulate.
And the money spend by the people.
>> And money must be spend by people.
That is a economy.
>> That is economy.
But some people are just to collect a money, never use it.
>> But some people just collect money, they never use it.
They have no time to spend money.
>> correct!
I think all people make a money in order to use a money.
>> I think all people make money in order to use it.
To use a money need a time.
>> To use money, time is needed.
Human being should have a free time, and are incerasing the efficiency of work.
>> Human beings should have a free time, and should increase the efficiency of work.
More time or more money? That is matter of balance.
>> More time or more money? That is a matter of balance.
Those who save only the money could be workaholic.
>> correct!
People should use the money well, and take a time to think and play.
>> People should use the money well, and take time to think and play.
Finally, the balance of time and money is very important.
>> correct!

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