Most families in wealthy countries are having less and less children. Is this a good thing or a bad

2015-05-01 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Not only in Korea but also in many west countries, there is a tendency to have less children than before. There are many parents who want to have just one child and even no child. Many factors can affect this kind of situation. It can be one of the reasons to let their children get a higher education. In addition, unlike the past, cost of living is also higher. But the most important reasons is because many women start to work and they begin to enjoy their lives. Actually, I cannot say that this circumstance is definitely good or absolutely bad since it has pros and cons. As for advantages, parents can concentrate their affection and investment to their one child so child's ability or quality can be improved. But as for disadvantage, because of decreasing birth rate, the number of population also has been declined, meaning shortage of worke force for the future development.

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Good morning Miss [이름]. Thank you for sending your homework. Please go over my corrections. Take care and have a good day! ~Kelly^^ Not only in Korea but also in many west countries, there is a tendency to have less children than before. >> Most families not only in Korea and but also in western countries have a tendency to have less children than before. There are many parents who want to have just one child and even no child. >> There are many parents who want to have just one child or no child at all. Many factors can affect this kind of situation. >> Correct. It can be one of the reasons to let their children get a higher education. >> One of the reasons for having less children is that they want their children to get  a higher education. In addition, unlike the past, cost of living is also higher. >> In addition, unlike in the past, the cost of living is also higher these days. But the most important reasons is because many women start to work and they begin to enjoy their lives. >> But the most important reason is because many women start to work and they begin to enjoy their lives.Actually, I cannot say that this circumstance is definitely good or absolutely bad since it has pros and cons. >> Correct. As for advantages, parents can concentrate their affection and investment to their one child so child\'s ability or quality can be improved. >> As for the advantages, parents can concentrate in giving their affection and investment to their child in developing his ability and personality. But as for disadvantage, because of decreasing birth rate, the number of population also has been declined, meaning shortage of worke force for the future development. >> As for the disadvantage, because of the decreasing birth rate, the number of population also has been declined, which results to shortage of work force for the country\'s future development.

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