Most families in wealthy countries are having less and less children. Is this a good thing or a bad
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Total fertility rates (TFRs) are plummeting around the world because more and more people don’t want to take a responsibility to raise their kids. They just like to enjoy their life. They could be accused of being too selfish. However, raising kids requires money, time, and your sacrifice, although they bring you some happiness. Having and raising kids are not just like a hobby, but it is the most difficult and challenging job in the world. When it comes to career development or making money, you can achieve to some extent whatever you want by making efforts. However, raising kids is often somewhat beyond your control. Even if you are intelligent, generous, and rich, your kids could be different from you.He/she could become a freak. Some people dedicate their whole life to their kids. Population stability is achieved when each woman bears an average of 2.1 kids over the course of her lifetime—one for her, one for her male partner, and a little overage to make up to childhood deaths.
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Total fertility rates (TFRs) are plummeting around the world because more and more people don’t want to take a responsibility to raise their kids.
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They just like to enjoy their life.
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They could be accused of being too selfish.
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However, raising kids requires money, time, and your sacrifice, although they bring you some happiness.
>> correct
Having and raising kids are not just like a hobby, but it is the most difficult and challenging job in the world.
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When it comes to career development or making money, you can achieve to some extent whatever you want by making efforts.
>> correct
However, raising kids is often somewhat beyond your control.
>> correct
Even if you are intelligent, generous, and rich, your kids could be different from you.
>> correct
He/she could become a freak.
>> correct
Some people dedicate their whole life to their kids.
>> correct
Population stability is achieved when each woman bears an average of 2.1 kids over the course of her lifetime—one for her, one for her male partner, and a little overage to make up to childhood deaths.
>> Did you mean: Population stability is achieved when each woman bears an average of 2.1 kids over the course of her lifetime;one for her, one for her male partner, and a little average to make up to childhood deaths.
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