Most modern families have both parents working and as a result children spend less and less time wit
학생이 쓴 원문
First reason is high prices of education for children. Many children have to learn play the piano, English, Mathematics and so on, before their go to school. Thus many both parents working and earn money for their children. Because family budget is insufficient from one person’s income.
Second, the strength working environment. Many companies operating from AM 9 to PM 6. Of course many office workers working over the PM 6. Therefore both parents have less time with their children.
Many children have emotional issue who both parents working. For example that children is nervous and depression than could spend many time with parents of children.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
~~Thank you for making your homework. Despite you have a lot things to work on but you still managed to make your homework. Again, thank you!
~~I agree with you in your opinion because I grew up with my both parents\' working, I spend all day in school and with my friends so I don\'t have many quality times with my mom and dad.
However, off course it\'s not a valid reason to be rebellious. We should appreciate what they are doing and make it as an inspiration to be very good in school. Anyway, I hope children with both parents working will excel more in school instead of giving headache to their parents.
~~See you in class Miss [이름]
First reason is high prices of education for children.
>> First reason is the high fees to acquire very good education for children.
Many children have to learn play the piano, English, Mathematics and so on, before their go to school.
>> Many children have to learn piano, English, Mathematics and so on before they go to school.
Thus many both parents working and earn money for their children.
>> Thus, both parents work to earn money for their children.
Because family budget is insufficient from one person’s income.
>> Because their family budget is insufficient from one person\'s income.
Second, the strength working environment.
>> Second, the nature of their working environment.
Many companies operating from AM 9 to PM 6.
>> Most companies operate from 9 AM to 6 PM.
Of course many office workers working over the PM 6.
>> And off course many office workers overtime.
Therefore both parents have less time with their children.
>> CORRECT
Many children have emotional issue who both parents working.
>> Many children have emotional issues of both parents\' working.
For example that children is nervous and depression than could spend many time with parents of children.
>> For example, children lacks confidence and experiences depression compared to children who has parents\' spending more time with them.
~~Thank you for making your homework. Despite you have a lot things to work on but you still managed to make your homework. Again, thank you!
~~I agree with you in your opinion because I grew up with my both parents\' working, I spend all day in school and with my friends so I don\'t have many quality times with my mom and dad.
However, off course it\'s not a valid reason to be rebellious. We should appreciate what they are doing and make it as an inspiration to be very good in school. Anyway, I hope children with both parents working will excel more in school instead of giving headache to their parents.
~~See you in class Miss [이름]
First reason is high prices of education for children.
>> First reason is the high fees to acquire very good education for children.
Many children have to learn play the piano, English, Mathematics and so on, before their go to school.
>> Many children have to learn piano, English, Mathematics and so on before they go to school.
Thus many both parents working and earn money for their children.
>> Thus, both parents work to earn money for their children.
Because family budget is insufficient from one person’s income.
>> Because their family budget is insufficient from one person\'s income.
Second, the strength working environment.
>> Second, the nature of their working environment.
Many companies operating from AM 9 to PM 6.
>> Most companies operate from 9 AM to 6 PM.
Of course many office workers working over the PM 6.
>> And off course many office workers overtime.
Therefore both parents have less time with their children.
>> CORRECT
Many children have emotional issue who both parents working.
>> Many children have emotional issues of both parents\' working.
For example that children is nervous and depression than could spend many time with parents of children.
>> For example, children lacks confidence and experiences depression compared to children who has parents\' spending more time with them.
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