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2017-09-25 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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Today I`m going to explain ‘Shutter Island’. THe peace officer, Teddy and his colleague Chuck came to Shutter Island for launching an investigation. It was about the woman who killed her three sons and daughters. Her name was ‘Rachel’ . Quite some time has passed but there was no progress in the investigation. In the meantime, he found a woman who asserted herself Rachel in a cave deep in the island. Then. he heard unbelievable facts. It was that in the lighthouse there were inhumane brain surgery for patients. He realized that`s why all people in this hospital looked weird and why he hurt. He took tranquilizer after entering the hospital. There is a reversal in movies. All this story was the fiction that he made. In fact, he was a mental case whose real name is ‘Andrew’ Chuck was also not his colleague. His real name was Dr.Sheehan and Andrew`s doctor. He who was shocked wanted to return to normal through the brain surgery.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]!
I didn\'t watch this movie but while reading your composition, it got me interested to watch this. Thank you! You did a good job in writing the plot of the story. Continue doing this since it will help you to improve your English more!
Today I`m going to explain ‘Shutter Island’.
>> correct!
OR>> Today, I\'m going to tell you about the movie \'Shutter Island\".
THe peace officer, Teddy and his colleague Chuck came to Shutter Island for launching an investigation.
>> The U.S Marshal, Teddy and his colleague Chuck went to Shutter Island to launch an investigation.
It was about the woman who killed her three sons and daughters. Her name was ‘Rachel’ .
>> It was about the woman who killed her three sons and daughters. Her name is \'Rachel\'.
Quite some time has passed but there was no progress in the investigation.
>> Quite some time had passed but there was no progress in the investigation.
In the meantime, he found a woman who asserted herself Rachel in a cave deep in the island.
>> In the meantime, he found a woman who claimed to be Rachel in a cave deep in the island.
Then, he heard unbelievable facts.
>> correct!
It was that in the lighthouse there were inhumane brain surgery for patients.
>> It was said that in the lighthouse, there was inhumane brain surgery for patients.
He realized that`s why all people in this hospital looked weird and why he hurt.
>> correct!
He took tranquilizer after entering the hospital.
>> He took a tranquilizer after entering the hospital.
There is a reversal in movies.
>> correct!
All this story was the fiction that he made.
>> correct!
In fact, he was a mental case whose real name is ‘Andrew’ Chuck was also not his colleague.
>> In fact, he was a mental case whose real name is ‘Andrew’ and Chuck was also not his colleague.
His real name was Dr.Sheehan and Andrew`s doctor.
>> His real name was Dr.Sheehan and Andrew`s his doctor.
He who was shocked wanted to return to normal through the brain surgery.
>> He was shocked so he wanted to return to normal through the brain surgery.

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