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2017-09-26 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

학생이 쓴 원문

I'd like to tell you about movie that I watched it on last weekend. The title is 'Memoir of a muderer'. It was story of book. Someone says movie was less touching compare with novel. However, I don't konw because I didn't read it. Actually, I don't like this story but I just had free time and there was that moive at that time. Athough, I like stars in movie. Muderer killed his father at first when he was young. He looked like middle school student. His father harass family and hit them. His family became peaceful after his death. He started to kill many people who he thought bad person. He stop it due to dementia. And then, he knows someone want to kill his doughter. Finally, two of muderers die. People is not God so can't conltrol any life. I wish all of kids had great chilhood with their family. Thank you.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Ann! How are you doing? I hope that you are doing good. Why don\'t you like the story when it is interesting? The movie is based on the true story of Korea\'s first serial murders in history, which took place between 1986 and 1991 in Hwaseong, Gyeonggi Province.
~Teacher Chloe
I\'d like to tell you about movie that I watched it on last weekend.
>>I\'d like to tell you about the movie I watched last weekend.
The title is \'Memoir of a muderer\'.
>>The title is \"Memoir Of A Murderer\".
It was story of book.
>>It is a novel story.
Someone says movie was less touching compare with novel.
>>Someone said that the movie is less touching compared to the original novel story.
However, I don\'t konw because I didn\'t read it.
>>However, I can\'t agree because I haven\'t read it.
Actually, I don\'t like this story but I just had free time and there was that moive at that time.
>>Actually, I don\'t like the story but, I just had no choice, there were not other movies to watch.
Athough, I like stars in movie.
>>Although, I like the casts of the movie.
Muderer killed his father at first when he was young.
>>The murdered killed his father when he was young.
He looked like middle school student.
>>I think it was when he was a middle school student.
His father harass family and hit them.
>>He did it because his father was abusive.
His family became peaceful after his death.
>>Correct!
OR:
>>After his death, his family became peaceful.
He started to kill many people who he thought bad person.
>>From then on, he started killing many people he thought are bad.
He stop it due to dementia.
>>Until he stopped from doing it because of Alzheimer\'s disease.
And then, he knows someone want to kill his doughter.
>>Despite of his disease, he tried to protect his daughter from his psychotic boyfriend.
Finally, two of muderers die.
>>Finally, two of the murderers died.
People is not God so can\'t conltrol any life.
>>People are not gods so, we can\'t control death.
I wish all of kids had great chilhood with their family.
>>I wish all kids had a great childhood with their family.
Thank you.
>>Correct!

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