"Movies and television negatively influence the way people live and behave." Do you agree or not? Wh

Hi there Sir [이름]!

Happy Tuesday!

Thanks for doing your essay.

I am so happy to receive a composition from you.

Teacher Nina

I agree on the saying that movies and television negatively influence the way people live and behave.

>> correct

In school or any training institutions, many teachers or instructors use visual materials to improve the efficiency of education rather than relying on text materials only.

>> correct

>> OR: In school or any training institutions, many teachers or instructors use visual materials to improve the efficiency of education rather than relying only on text materials.

It implies that movies or televisions can have a significant impact on children’s education and their behavior.

>> correct

This is why the governments are making use of television or movies as a means of placing public campaigns or advertisements to educate their citizens.

>> correct

We all have experienced that we were touched by good television programs or movies.

>> correct

Or we were somewhat outraged by violent scenes on movies or televisions.

>> correct

Almost all the countries have legislated and have a regulation of enforcing a minimum level of censorship for such violent or obscene pictures.

>> correct

Many experts and parents are concerned about people’s addiction to virtual video games due to their negative influence.

>> correct

We’ve even often seen copycat crimes.

>> Better: We’ve often seen copycat crimes.

>> OR: We even often see copycat crimes.