music

2020-08-28 · 첨삭 강사 Fiona

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since i was in high school student, i\\\'ve been into the music at that time i was desperate christian so the church butler recomended me joining the church choir and i agreed well afer that, i felt holliness whiling song a hyum it gives me great pleasure since them, i\'ve been into the music. actually i think music is the one piece of my whole life i really like to listen to all kinds of the music such as soft rock music, hip-hop music and rock music and since i song a hynm when i was in high school, whenever i\\\'m overwhelmed by my life, l try to listen to the hyum it helps me relieve my strees

강사 첨삭

A happy Friday morning [이름] Woo! 
Thanks for sending me your homework :) 
I think it\'s good to hear your voice sing in our class someday. 
Thank you :) 

since i was in high school student, i\\\'ve been into the music
>>I\'ve been into music since I was in high school.
at that time i was desperate christian so
the church butler recomended me joining the church choir and i agreed
>>At the time I was a desperate Christian, so the church butler urged me to join the church choir and I agreed.
well afer that, i felt holliness whiling song a hyum
>>After that, I felt holy and hummed a song.
it gives me great pleasure
>>It gives me great pleasure.
since them, i\'ve been into the music. 
>>I\'ve been into music since then. 
actually i think music is the one piece of my whole life
>>Actually I think music is a part of my life.
i really like to listen to all kinds of the music such as soft rock music, hip-hop music and rock music
>>I really like listening to all kinds of music, including soft rock music, hip-hop music, rock music, and so on.
and since i song a hynm when i was in high school, whenever i\\\'m overwhelmed by my life, l try to listen to the hyum
it helps me relieve my strees
>>And because I sing hymns in high school, I try to hear that hum whenever I\'m overwhelmed in my life. The humming relieves my stress.

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