Music
학생이 쓴 원문
I think music is one of the best ways to make my feeling cheerful.
Because when i hear music when i stressed out,my emotion become happy.In my case,it is not easy to change my emotion but when i listening music,i feel comfort.I think live without music is easy.But if you fascinated by music,it is hard to live without music.
강사 첨삭
Hello, David! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)
~ Teacher Tricia
I think music is one of the best ways to make my feeling cheerful.
>>> I think music is one of the best ways to make me feel cheerful.
Because when i hear music when i stressed out,my emotion become happy.
>>> Because when I hear music when I am stressed out, my emotion becomes happy.
In my case,it is not easy to change my emotion but when i listening music,i feel comfort.
>>> In my case, it is not easy to change my emotion but when I listen to music, I feel comfort.
I think live without music is easy.
>>> I think living without music is easy.
But if you fascinated by music,it is hard to live without music.
>>> But if you are fascinated by music, it is hard to live without music.
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