Music

2010-08-30 · 첨삭 강사 Jessica

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Recently, I have gotten wrapped up in the group singer which is named 'Cradle'. They pursue a genre of Jazz Hiphop, and their songs are very fascinating. During web-surfing I stumbled upon their songs. Immediately, I bought their CD. The Cradle's music is based on Jazz music (Back ground music is Jazz.)and adds to intense Hiphop beat, so their music is very polished and powerful. Among the Cradle's songs, my favorite songs are 'Your love' and 'Soulbirds'. If you had the chace, I recommend you to listen to it. You will never regret.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!..Oh, wow I would definitely hear their songs. I like listening to music so I would surf on that too. Thank you for recommending me. Nice composition. See you.     Recently, I have gotten wrapped up in the group singer which is named 'Cradle'. >>>Recently, I have gotten wrapped up in a group singers named “Cradle”. They pursue a genre of Jazz Hiphop, and their songs are very fascinating. >>>They pursue a genre of Jazz and hiphop. And their songs are very fascinating. During web-surfing I stumbled upon their songs. >>>During web surfing, I stumbled on their songs.Immediately, I bought their CD. >>>correctThe Cradle's music is based on Jazz music (Back ground music is Jazz.)and adds to intense Hiphop beat, so their music is very polished and powerful. >>>correct Among the Cradle's songs, my favorite songs are 'Your love' and 'Soulbirds'. >>>correctIf you had the chace, I recommend you to listen to it. >>>If you have the chance, I recommend you to listen to it.You will never regret. >>>I promise, you will never regret.

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