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I also like to listening to music very much.
When I commute , I always listen to something which is English conversation or just a song.
Music enriches our life. When I am in a bad mood , music heals me.
and music is also good friend on my journey.
When I drive , listening to music is very helpful not to fall asleep.
The main way of listening to music is using my iphone.
Before buying it, I brought a mp3 player with me.
But since i phone is 2 in 1 gadget , I don't have to bring a mp3 player anymore.
In ordet to put music into i phone , we need to do synchronization between PC and I-phone.
That is one of the biggest weaknesses i phone has.
Compared with I-phone , other phone maker using android operating system doesn't need
synhronization.
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I also like to listening to music very much.
>>I like listening to music very much.When I commute , I always listen to something which is English conversation or just a song.
>.correct!Music enriches our life. When I am in a bad mood , music heals me.
>>correct!and music is also good friend on my journey.
>>correct!When I drive , listening to music is very helpful not to fall asleep.>>correct!The main way of listening to music is using my iphone.
>>correct!Before buying it, I brought a mp3 player with me.
>>Before buying it, I brought an mp3 player with me.But since i phone is 2 in 1 gadget , I don't have to bring a mp3 player anymore.
>>But since i phone is 2 in 1 gadget , I don't have to bring an mp3 player anymore.In ordet to put music into i phone , we need to do synchronization between PC and I-phone.
>>In ordet to put music into an i phone , we need to do synchronization between PC and I-phone.That is one of the biggest weaknesses i phone has.
>>That is one of the biggest disadvantage an i phone has.Compared with I-phone , other phone maker using android operating system doesn't need synhronization.
>>correct!
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