My 7th compostition on happy wensday.

2012-12-19 · 첨삭 강사 Alice

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Hi. Alice. Do you know how important today is for me?. Haha, virtually today is a election day for our president in my country. It's so important that our country make this special time as a holiday in order to have enough time to take a vote. (Sometimes, many people take advantage of this time just going travel and playing wiht their friends without voting.)In case of me, I should have applied for absent voting because i'm not in my hometown so that, I could not use my valuable right for my country. So, although I should deeply regret for my behavior, I went snow-board with my coworkers using this time instead. While having wonderful time, I could forget my bad memories fully for a while.(Ha, Ha). Anyhow, our mass mess media is announcing the vote count results at the peak level now. Compared to your country's 6 years of tenure, we have only 4 years. Both of them has different period of reigning a country, I really sure about that a good leader makes thier country better place to live

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Hi there [이름]! Thanks for sending this over. ^^ Yes, it is your election today. Oh no, you didn\'t cast your vote? Although if ever, who are you going to vote for? Call you later, [이름]!^^ ~ Teacher Alice Hi. Alice. >> Hi Alice. >> OR Hi Alice! >> OR Hi Alice, Do you know how important today is for me? >> Correct! Haha, virtually today is a election day for our president in my country. >> Haha, virtually today is the election day for our president in my country. >> OR Haha, virtually today is our presidential election. It\'s so important that our country make this special time as a holiday in order to have enough time to take a vote. >> It\'s so important for our country to make this special time as a holiday in order to have enough time to take a vote. >> It\'s so important for our country to declare this special time as a holiday in order for people to have enough time to cast their votes. (Sometimes, many people take advantage of this time just going travel and playing wiht their friends without voting.) >> (Sometimes, many people take advantage of this time just going to travel and playing with their friends without voting.) In case of me, I should have applied for absent voting because i\'m not in my hometown so that, I could not use my valuable right for my country. >> In my case, I should have applied for absent voting because I\'m not in my hometown so that I could not use my valuable right for my country. So, although I should deeply regret for my behavior, I went snow-board with my coworkers using this time instead. >> So, although I should deeply regret for my behavior, I went snow-boarding with my coworkers using this time instead. While having wonderful time, I could forget my bad memories fully for a while. >> While having a wonderful time, I could forget my bad memories fully for a while. (Ha, Ha). Anyhow, our mass mess media is announcing the vote count results at the peak level now. >> (Ha, Ha). Anyhow, our mass media is announcing the vote count results at the peak level now. Compared to your country\'s 6 years of tenure, we have only 4 years. >> Correct! *I think it\'s five years in Korea. Both of them has different period of reigning a country, I really sure about that a good leader makes thier country better place to live >> Both of them have different periods of reigning a country. I\'m really sure that a good leader makes thier country a better place to live in.

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