My aunt

2019-01-16 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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I have an aunt and she has been giving me much love since I was born. When I was younger, my aunt was also younger and she was healthier than now,so I have never worried about her health. However, her habits which has been lasting for long time make her health bad now. Several years ago, she got an opperation on her spine. It took much time for her to get better. After this surgery,there have been many opperations over years. I want her to consider her health and try to work out or exercise in the gym, not hanging out much time in the house. I hope the getting better in her health this year the most.

강사 첨삭

Jay,

I didn\'t think about my health when I was much younger too. Now that I\'m older, I fully understood the importance of good health.

~Lynn

I have an aunt and she has been giving me much love since I was born.

>> correct!

When I was younger, my aunt was also younger and she was healthier than now, so I have never worried about her health.

>> correct!

However, her habits which has been lasting for long time make her health bad now.

>> However, her habits which she has been doing for a long time made her health bad now.

Several years ago, she got an opperation on her spine. It took much time for her to get better.

>> correct!

After this surgery,there have been many opperations over years.

>> After this surgery,there had been many opperations over the years.

I want her to consider her health and try to work out or exercise in the gym, not hanging out much time in the house.

>> I want her to consider her health and try to work out or exercise in the gym not staying most of the time at home. 

I hope the getting better in her health this year the most.

>> I hope she\'ll be healthier this year.

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