My bad accident\'s experience

2022-01-18 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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When I was working as a kindergarten teacher, I experienced a really terrible accident. That is what a child was seriously injured by mistake. Immediately, I hugged the injured child and headed for the hospital emergency room. And then I took care of her until she was fully recovered and left the hospital.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름] Ha!
What a terrible accident.
Maybe, you can share more about this in class.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
When I was working as a kindergarten teacher, I experienced a really terrible accident.
>> Correct
That is what a child was seriously injured by mistake.
>> That is when a child was seriously injured because of my mistake.
Immediately, I hugged the injured child and headed for the hospital emergency room.
>> Immediately, I carried the injured child and brought him to the hospital emergency room.
And then I took care of her until she was fully recovered and left the hospital.
>> And then, I took care of her until she was fully recovered and she was able to leave the hospital.

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