My bad experience while traveling
학생이 쓴 원문
Last summer I visited France with my friend for 9 days.
We planned to stay in Nice while 2 days, and we have to came back to Paris at night.
The first trouble occured. It is that the plane was delayed almost 2 hours.
We got a little stress, but we tried to keep our tempers.
However, the second trouble occurred when we arrived at Paris.
My friend wanted to take a bus, but I insisted the way to take a train.
My insistence almost destroyed our friendship because we took a more time to come back to out hotel than taking a bus.
At that situation, I closed my mouth because I didn\'t want to fight my friend.
This happening was over after I apologized about my wrong choice.
And then, we had a good times while in France.
강사 첨삭
Thank you for sharing this experience, [이름]. ^^ What matters is that you and your friend enjoyed France. ^^We got a little stress, but we tried to keep our tempers.
-Khai
Last summer I visited France with my friend for 9 days.
>> CORRECT
We planned to stay in Nice while 2 days, and we have to came back to Paris at night.
We planned to stay in Nice while 2 days, and we have to came back to Paris at night.
>> We planned to stay in Nice for 2 days, and we have to come back to Paris at night.
The first trouble occured.>> The first trouble occurred.
It is that the plane was delayed almost 2 hours.
>> The plane was delayed for almost 2 hours.
>> We were a bit stressed, but we tried to keep our tempers.
However, the second trouble occurred when we arrived at Paris.>> The second trouble occurred when we arrived in Paris.
My friend wanted to take a bus, but I insisted the way to take a train.>> My friend wanted to take a bus, but I insisted on taking a train.
My insistence almost destroyed our friendship because we took a more time to come back to out hotel than taking a bus.
My insistence almost destroyed our friendship because we took a more time to come back to out hotel than taking a bus.
>> My insistence almost destroyed our friendship because we took more time to come back to our hotel compared to when we took a bus.
At that situation, I closed my mouth because I didn\'t want to fight my friend.
At that situation, I closed my mouth because I didn\'t want to fight my friend.
>> In that situation, I closed my mouth because I didn\'t want to fight my friend.
This happening was over after I apologized about my wrong choice.>> After that, I apologized for my wrong choice.
And then, we had a good times while in France.
And then, we had a good times while in France.
>> And then, we had a good time while in France.
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