My best

2023-01-20 · 첨삭 강사 Jhozel

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My best experience about travel was riding a turning boat in Vietnam. When we went to Vietnam, I was 15. We ride a turning boat that was a part of itinerary. I took a boat with my mom. It was a boat that spins on a river. Water was splashed every time it spun. That was like playing in water.

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Hello, [이름] U!
That sound really fun! ^^ Thanks for sharing your experience! 
I\'m looking closely at the photo to see if it\'s you. Haha!
Anyway, have great long weekend!
-T.Jhozel 

My best experience about travel was riding a turning boat in Vietnam. 
>> My favorite travel memory was riding on a turning boat in Vietnam. 
When we went to Vietnam, I was 15. 
>>I was 15 when we went to Vietnam.
We ride a turning boat that was a part of itinerary. 
>>  We ride a turning boat as part of the itinerary.
I took a boat with my mom. 
>> My mother and I took a boat trip.
It was a boat that spins on a river. 
>> It was a spinning boat on a river.
Water was splashed every time it spun. 
>> Every time it spun, water splashed.
That was like playing in water.
>> It was like playing in the water.

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