My best dream is getting a laptop as my birthday gift from my parents.
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My best dream is getting a laptop as my birthday gift from my parents.
When I get this gift in my dream, I’m so impressed. Because I really need to new laptop as a university student.
A few days later, I finally got a new laptop from my parents, and I was surprised, because my dream became a reality.
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Hi Kara!
When I get this gift in my dream, I’m so impressed. Because I really need to new laptop as a university student.
>> When I got this gift in my dream, I was impressed because I really need a new laptop as a university student.
You are a sweet daughter.
It feels really good to give something to our parents.
I hope you would be able to provide teh laptop for your parents.
Andrea
My best dream is getting a laptop as my birthday gift from my parents.
>> Getting a laptop for my parents as a birthday present is my greatest dream.
When I get this gift in my dream, I’m so impressed. Because I really need to new laptop as a university student.
>> When I got this gift in my dream, I was impressed because I really need a new laptop as a university student.
A few days later, I finally got a new laptop from my parents, and I was surprised, because my dream became a reality.
>> Correct
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