My best friend.

2010-12-02 · 첨삭 강사 abby

학생이 쓴 원문

A friend of mine is a very truthful cristian. We first met when I took the military service. We finished the military service and do what we has to do. Some irritating problems are that he forces me to go church with him whenever the weekends. I'm not a christian, and I have my own things to do on weekends. I always have made an excuse, for example taking exam, very important promises, for not going to church with him. I am just worried that we grow apart(get estranged) by this problem. I told him that you are more important to me than God and even though I do not believe God, I believe in you. Actually the chrismas is getting soon. He invited me to his church again. However I will go to see my best friend and tell him I was sorry.

강사 첨삭

A Very Good Tuesday to you [이름]! I know the feeling of  being forced to something that you don’t know. Anyway, since he’s your bestfriend, I guess there’s no harm if you go with him to church. But that’s just my opinion. Why don’t you just try it. You don’t know, you might like going there the next time. But you can also have your choice, if you really don’t like, then tell him frankly. I’m pretty sure he would understand you. Besides, your friends, right?... Moreover, I’d like to talk about your composition. You did very well and made few flaws. Anyhow,  you have to always be reminded of the punctuation marks. Over all, you did well. Keep up the good work and I’ll see you tomorrow! Enjoy the rest of the day! ^_^ Take care! T. Abby My best friend. >> correct A friend of mine is a very truthful cristian. >> A friend of mine is a very truthful Christian.We first met when I took the military service. >> correctWe finished the military service and do what we has to do. >> When we finished the military service, we did the things that we need to do. >> We finished the military service and do what we have to do.Some irritating problems are that he forces me to go church with him whenever the weekends. >> An irritating problem is when he forces me to go to church with  him on weekends. >> The thing that irritates me is when he forces me to go to church with him every weekend.I'm not a christian, and I have my own things to do on weekends. >> correctI always have made an excuse, for example taking exam, very important promises, for not going to church with him. >> I always have made excuses just for me not to go with him at the church, for example, I would say that I will be taking an exam or I have an important appointment to have.I am just worried that we grow apart(get estranged) by this problem. >> I am just worried that we might grow apart and get estranged by this issue/problem/situation.I told him that you are more important to me than God and even though I do not believe God, I believe in you. >> correctActually the chrismas is getting soon. >> Actually, Christmas is getting soon. >> Actually, Christmas is coming. He invited me to his church again. >> correct >> He invited me to go to  his church again. However I will go to see my best friend and tell him I was sorry. >> However, I will go to see  my bestfriend and tell him how sorry I am.

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·