My best friends are Hwang Da Song, and Hwang Da Sol.
학생이 쓴 원문
They\'re twins. We met at Kinder Garden. My class was Lemon class, and they\'re class was apple class. That day was an athletics meeting, a ball rolling contest is begin! Da Sol, and Da Song team have to roll the ball, but they fell down at the first time! I don\'t know why, but it will be ambarrassing. I was surprised that time, but I ran to them and helped to go to a nurse house. We became more than closer. We went same elemantary school, same art academy, also we are having same middle school. I don\'t know they\'re personality in the past, but I know they\'re personality now very correctly. Da Song is older sister, and Da Sol is younger sister. Da Song is very cold person, but actually very kind(like Elsa). Da Sol is very kind too, she is so cute and very energatic(like Anna). Looks like the second Disney Frozen sister. I love Da Song, and Da sol very much!! I hope they like me as much as I do.
강사 첨삭
Hi Maria!
It is very interesting to have twin friends! That means that you have double the fun when you play with them and double the joy when you are share good moments.
Of course you have to double your energy when you are together.
Thanks so much for answering your homework very quickly.
See you tomorrow in class!
-T. Donna =)
>> Correct!
Or: kindergarden
My class was Lemon class, and they\'re class was apple class.
>> My class was Lemon class, and their class was Apple class.
That day was an athletics meeting, a ball rolling contest is begin! Da Sol, and Da Song team have to roll the ball, but they fell down at the first time!
>> That day was an athletics meeting, a ball rolling contest began! Da Sol, and Da Song\'s team have to roll the ball, but they fell down at the first time!
I don\'t know why, but it will be ambarrassing. I was surprised that time, but I ran to them and helped to go to a nurse house.
>> I don\'t know why, but it was embarrassing. I was surprised that time, but I ran to them and helped them to go to the nurse\'s house.
We became more than closer. We went same elemantary school, same art academy, also we are having same middle school.
>> We became closer. We went to the same elementary school, same art academy, and we also have the same middle school.
I don\'t know they\'re personality in the past, but I know they\'re personality now very correctly.
>> I don\'t know their personality in the past, but I know their personality now very correctly.
Da Song is older sister, and Da Sol is younger sister.
>> Da Song is the older sister, and Da Sol is the younger sister.
Da Song is very cold person, but actually very kind(like Elsa).
>> Da Song is a very cold person, but actually very kind (like Elsa).
Da Sol is very kind too, she is so cute and very energatic(like Anna).
>> Correct!
Or: energetic (SPELLING)
Looks like the second Disney Frozen sister.
>> They look like the Disney Frozen sisters.
I love Da Song, and Da sol very much!! I hope they like me as much as I do.
>> I love Da Song, and Da Sol very much! I hope they like me as much as I do with them.
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