My best place
학생이 쓴 원문
My best place is 'Holy Name Of Mary school'.
First of all I'v been there for one year.
I was a student because I went 'Holy Name Of Mary school'
I was in the fifth-one class.
At first, I was very schocked because I didn't know how to make lots of friends.
At the end of third semester I almost got a lot of friends.
At that moment, I wished the time to go back and make more friends.
If I comepare this school to korean school, I would pick Holy.
In Korean school boys and giarls always fight and not nice to each others also some children in Korean, don't pay attention and listen.
In 'Holy' boys and girls are always nice to each others and try to pay attention and get a good grade on their report card.
If it is possible I want to go back that moment.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Nice place.
Maybe you can get back there in a few years.
Here are your corrections: -Teacher JM
My best place is 'Holy Name Of Mary school'.
>>>My best place is the 'Holy Name Of Mary school'.
First of all I'v been there for one year.
First of all I'v been there for one year.
>>>Correct^^
I was a student because I went 'Holy Name Of Mary school'
I was a student because I went 'Holy Name Of Mary school'
>>>I was a student there because I went to the 'Holy Name Of Mary school'
I was in the fifth-one class.
I was in the fifth-one class.
>>>Correct^^
At first, I was very schocked because I didn't know how to make lots of friends.
At first, I was very schocked because I didn't know how to make lots of friends.
>>>At first, I was very shocked because I didn't know how to make lots of friends.
At the end of third semester I almost got a lot of friends.
At the end of third semester I almost got a lot of friends.
>>>At the end of the third semester, I almost got a lot of friends.
At that moment, I wished the time to go back and make more friends.
At that moment, I wished the time to go back and make more friends.
>>>At that moment, I wished that I had time to go back and make more friends.
If I comepare this school to korean school, I would pick Holy.
If I comepare this school to korean school, I would pick Holy.
>>>If I were to compare this school to a Korean school, I would pick Holy.
In Korean school boys and giarls always fight and not nice to each others also some children in Korean, don't pay attention and listen.
In Korean school boys and giarls always fight and not nice to each others also some children in Korean, don't pay attention and listen.
>>>In Korean schools, boys and girls always fight and are not nice to each other. Some children in Korea, don't pay attention and listen.
In 'Holy' boys and girls are always nice to each others and try to pay attention and get a good grade on their report card.
In 'Holy' boys and girls are always nice to each others and try to pay attention and get a good grade on their report card.
>>>In 'Holy,' boys and girls are always nice to each other and try to pay attention while getting a good grade on their report cards.
If it is possible I want to go back that moment.
If it is possible I want to go back that moment.
>>>If it is possible, I want to go back to those moments.
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