My best trip in middle school

2021-03-01 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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When I was first grade in middle school, I went to trip with my friends who involve in student government. The whether was pretty good, because it was fall. Also, I made soap that is good for our skin. It was very interesting. If I have a chance, I want to go there with my friends again.

강사 첨삭

Hi, A-Rim! Thank you for sharing about your best trip in middle school. I would be thrilled to go to a place like that, too. I am sure you had a wonderful time!

~ Teacher Marie 

When I was first grade in middle school, I went to trip with my friends who involve in student government.

>> When I was in frist grade middle school, I went to a trip with my friends who were also involved in the student government.

OR: When I was a first grader in middle school, I went to a trip with my friends from the student government.

The whether was pretty good, because it was fall.

>> The weather that day was pretty good because it was in fall.

Also, I made soap that is good for our skin.

>> CORRECT.

OR: I also made soap that is good for our skin.
It was very interesting.

>> CORRECT.

If I have a chance, I want to go there with my friends again.

>> CORRECT.

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