My best(worst?) travel
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello sir,
Wow! you climbed Mt. Kilimanjaro? I wish I could do that too but I doubt it. I don\'t think I could walk that high. Thank you for sharing me your experience of your climb of one of the famous mountains of the world. Have a great day ahead and I\'ll talk to you tomorrow! See you!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
A Chinese proverb says that \"If you read ten thousand books, you communicate with God, If you travel around 10,000 kilometer, you are not confuse more.\"
>>A Chinese proverb says that \"If you read ten thousand books, you communicate with God, If you travel around 10,000 kilometers, you are not confuse anymore.\"
I traveled a lot for work.
>>correct!
My impressive trip was going up Mt. Kilimanjaro.
>>correct!
Height of the mountain is 5,895m.
>>The height of the mountain is 5,895m.
I were walking 20 kilometers per a day for five days.
>>I walked for 20 kilometers per day in five days.
I gradually made attitude high every day.
>>The altitude gradually grows higher everyday.
I was a dizzy near 4,000 meters.
>>I was dizzy near 4,000 meters high.
At first, I knew my strenth was weak.
>>At first, I knew I was growing weak.
But it is High Attitude illness.
>>But it was the High Altitude illness.
The higher I walk, the thinner the air is.
>>The higher I walked, the thinner the air.
The weather is getting colder.
>>correct!
I kept quite, I seemed to throw up.
>>I kept quiet because I felt like throwing up.
Even though I couldn\'t walk at 5,000 meters, I wake up at dawn, walked to the top.
>>Even though I couldn\'t walk at 5,000 meters, I woke up at dawn, and walked to the top.
It is surrouding only a pitch darkness and permanent snow.
>>Its surrounding is pitch darkness and permanent snow.
I were very cold and so sleepy.
>>I was very cold and so sleepy.
I slept sitting on rocks between permanent snow.
>>I slept sitting on the rocks between the permanent snow.
The Black man guide woke up me.
>>correct!
I felt terribly sleepy.
>>correct!
But I got up, and walked and walked.
>>correct!
Finally I standed on the top of Mt. Kilimanzaro.
>>Finally, I stood on the top of Mt. Kilimanjaro.
I still couldn\'t forget the moment and excitement.
>>I still couldn\'t forget the moment and excitement I felt at that time.
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