My biggest goal in my life is living happily with family.

2021-03-09 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

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My biggest goal in my life is not unusual and so much big. I want to live just happily with family and wished to have my own job. When I think of my past life, I lived ordinary life and accomplished getting my own job formore than 20 years. I satisfied with my life and my career enough. It is good for my health to think positively. ^^ If there is another goal in my life, I want to live in attached house inclding backyard which dogs can run and play at. I wish that the goal will be able to be achieved.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Ju [이름]. I wish you all the best on your next goal. I hope you\'ll be able to achieve it. Thank you for sharing your goals and your own thoughts on the topic. I look forward to talking to you tomorrow for our class. Have a good one! ~Teacher Jane c\",)


My biggest goal in my life is not unusual and so much big.
>> CORRECT =)

I want to live just happily with family and wished to have my own job.
>> CORRECT =)

When I think of my past life, I lived ordinary life and accomplished getting my own job formore than 20 years.
>> When I think of my past life, I lived an ordinary life and accomplished getting my own job for more than 20 years.

I satisfied with my life and my career enough.
>> I am satisfied enough with my life and my career.

It is good for my health to think positively. ^^
>> CORRECT =)

If there is another goal in my life, I want to live in attached house inclding backyard which dogs can run and play at.
>> If there is another goal in my life, I want to live in an attached house including a backyard where dogs can run and play.

I wish that the goal will be able to be achieved.
>> CORRECT =)

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