My birthday party!!

2013-05-06 · 첨삭 강사 Michelle

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My birthday is Aril 27th! But I couldn't open the party because of exam! So today, I have a party!! I go to the buffet with my family. I eat steak, pork, sosauge, ice cream, sushi, noodle, pasta, etc~!! Oh, I'm so full~^^ Also, I'm happy^^ I spend enjoy day with party~

강사 첨삭

Hello there!
Thanks a lot for sending this in.^^
I truly love checking your works.
Keep on writing, okay?
Well, here is a proverb that you may think about:
\"Absence makes the heart grow fonder.\"

Belated happy birthday!

I am so glad that you had a great time with your family.^^

You ate a lot!^^

Maybe we can still talk about these ones in class, if you don\'t mind.
Have a good day!

My birthday is Aril 27th!

>>My birthday is on the 27th of April.
But I couldn\'t open the party because of exam!

>> But I couldn\'t hold a party because of our exam!
So today, I have a party!!

>> Correct

OR >> So today, I will hold a party!^^
I go to the buffet with my family.

>>I will go to a buffet restaurant with my family.

>> I went to a buffet restaurant with my family.^^
I eat steak, pork, sosauge, ice cream, sushi, noodle, pasta, etc~!!
>>I will eat steaks, pork, sausage, ice cream, sushi, noodles, pasta, etc.!

>>I ate steaks, pork, sausages, ice cream, sushi, noodles, pasta, etc.!^^

Oh, I\'m so full~^^

>> Correct!

Also, I\'m happy^^

>> Correct!
I spend enjoy day with party~

>> I enjoyed my party.

>>I had a good time.^^

>>I had fun at the party.^^

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