My birthday present

2014-08-20 · 첨삭 강사 Winnie

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My birthday is October 31th. My dad and mom told me about the present. They said the present is smartphone. My phone is not good so my mom and dad said change the phone to very good phone. I`m so happy. I always want to change my phone, but my birthday is October 31th. It`s to long to wait, but I`m very happy!

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름], Your birthday is getting near honey. I want to be the first person to greet you \"Happy Birthday\". Just try to enjoy your birthday celebration. Thank\'s for the homework tonight. !~Teacher Winnie~!   My birthday is October 31th. >> My birthday is on October 31th. My dad and mom told me about the present. >> My dad and mom told me about my present. They said the present is smartphone. >> They said that my present would be a smart phone. My phone is not good so my mom and dad said change the phone to very good phone. >> My old phone is not good so my parents said they will change it to a better one. I`m so happy. I always want to change my phone, but my birthday is October 31th. >> I\'m so happy. I always wanted to change my phone but my birthday is on October 31th so I can\'t have the phone yet. It`s to long to wait, but I`m very happy! >>I\'ve been waiting for a long time. I\'m so happy!

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