My braveness and persistence
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Thank you for your homework, Yu [이름]!
Your efforts will go a long way!
-Hanna ^^
I have started an indoor wall climbing which is my new hobby in these year.
>>I have started indoor wall climbing as a new hobby this year.
Climbing brought a lot of fun, healing and learning to me.
>>Climbing brought me a lot of fun, healing and learning.
Especially, I have been finding my braveness and persistence during climbing time.
>>Especially, I have been discovering my bravery and persistence during climbing sessions.
I\'m not afraid of failure by trying to climb challenging wall and retrying a number of times when I didn\'t success in one trial.
>>I\'m not afraid of failing to climb challenging walls and retrying a number of times when I don\'t succeed on the first attempt.
My climbing mate often say that \"I don\'t know you are quite aggressive person\" and then I said that \"I like myself in here\".
>>My climbing mates often say \"I don\'t know you are quite aggressive person\" and then I tell them \"I like the version of myself I find in this activity.\".
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