my busiest day of the week

2021-02-16 · 첨삭 강사 Rina

학생이 쓴 원문

Students like me, have to go to the academy and we should go to the s[이름]ol. I think busiest day is Monday and Friday. At Monday and Friday, there are not much of academy, but the academy I am going at Monday and Friday takes a lot of time. At Monday, I wake up at 8:00 and I arrive at my classroom at nine o clock. At 3:00, the class is over and I come back to my home. Then, I have to do my homework for my English academy. Then, I review the vocabulary word from last lesson. When I finish my homework and review all of my vocab word, it\'s 4 pm. Then, I relax and have some free time until 5:00. At five o clock, I have to eat dinner so I can go to the academy. At five thirty, I have to change my clothes and brush my hair. At 6:24, I ride a bus (s[이름]ol bus maybe) and arrive my academy at 7 pm. Finally we start our class at 7pm and finish at 10 pm. Then, I ride the bus again and come back home at 10:25 and I eat some snack and pack my backpack for s[이름]ol tomorrow.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! ^^
You really have a very busy day~
Students in Korea are amazing because you really study hard, both in s[이름]ol and academy. 
You can do it!~

- T. Rina


1. Students like me, have to go to the academy and we should go to the s[이름]ol. 
>> CORRECT!

2. I think busiest day is Monday and Friday. 
>> I think the busiest days are Mondays and Fridays. 

3. At Monday and Friday, there are not much of academy, but the academy I am going at Monday and Friday takes a lot of time.
>> On Mondays and Fridays, there are not much of academy, but the academies I go to on those days take a lot of time. 

4. At Monday, I wake up at 8:00 and I arrive at my classroom at nine o clock. 
>> On Mondays, I wake up at 8:00 and I arrive at my class room at 9:00.

5. At 3:00, the class is over and I come back to my home. 
>> CORRECT!

6. Then, I have to do my homework for my English academy. 
>> CORRECT!

7. Then, I review the vocabulary word from last lesson.
>> Then, I review the vocabulary words from the last lesson.

8. When
 I finish my homework and review all of my vocab word, it\'s 4 pm. 
>> When I finish my homework and review all of the vocabulary words, it\'s already 4:00 p.m. 

9. Then, I relax and have some free time until 5:00. 
>> CORRECT!

10. At five o clock, I have to eat dinner so I can go to the academy. 
>> CORRECT!

11. At five thirty, I have to change my clothes and brush my hair.
>> CORRECT!

12. At 6:24, I ride a bus (s[이름]ol bus maybe) and arrive my academy at 7 pm. 
>> At 6:24, I ride a bus-- a s[이름]ol bus, and arrive at the academy at 7:00 p.m. 

13. Finally we start our class at 7pm and finish at 10 pm. 
>> CORRECT!

14. Then, I ride the bus again and come back home at 10:25 and I eat some snack and pack my backpack for s[이름]ol tomorrow.
>> Then, I ride the bus again and come back home at 10:25 and I eat some snacks and pack my backpack for s[이름]ol tomorrow.

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