my bussiness

2020-07-31 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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it is fine weather. I am at home. I am busy day. I will have a twice meeting. first meeting is at Gangnam. second is at Sangamdong. I guess to drive about 3 or 4 hours. I like drive but I don`t like drive in seoule. Seoule is very heavy traffic. I have tried a new business in my company. but economy is not good because of corona. allmost company don`t spend money. so new deal is growing down less and less .price is growing down less and less. my business`s situation was good and bad. yesterday my new deal was bad. I guessed to succeed at yesterday moring. but it become bad at afternoon. so I will have to plan second business. My year\'s plan is to do a little work. but I was working too hard.

강사 첨삭

it is fine weather.

>>> The weather is fine today.

>> OR: It is a fine weather outside today.

I am at home.

>>> correct

am busy day.

>>> It is a busy day.

I will have a twice meeting.

>>> I will have two meetings to attend today.

first meeting is at Gangnam.

>>> The first meeting is in Gangnam.

second is at Sangamdong.

>>> The second is in Sangamdong.
I guess to drive about 3 or 4 hours.

>>> I guess I would have to drive for about 3 to 4 hours.

I like drive but I don`t like drive in seoule.

>>> I like driving but I don\'t like driving in Seoul.

Seoule is very heavy traffic.

>>> Seoul has a very heavy traffic.
I have tried a new business in my company.

>>> correct

but economy is not good because of corona.

>>> But the economy is not good because of corona virus.

allmost company don`t spend money.

>>> Almost all companies don\'t spend money.
so new deal is growing down less and less .

>>> So it is very rare to close a deal.

>> OR: So there are lesser deals closed.

price is growing down less and less.

>>> Prices are going down.

my business`s situation was good and bad.

>>> My business\' situation was good but now it bad.
yesterday my new deal was bad.

>>> The deal yesterday was bad.

I guessed to succeed at yesterday moring.

>>> I hoped to succeed yesterday morning.

but it become bad at afternoon.

>>> But the result was bad in the afternoon.
so I will have to plan second business.

>>> So I am planning on a second business.

My year\'s plan is to do a little work.

>>> My year\'s plan was to do a little work.

but I was working too hard.

>>> But I have been working hard so far.

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