My career

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~Teacher Nova.

My career is Junior product manager for Linen care mainly for Steam iron.

>> My position in the company is Junior Product Manager for Lined, mainly for Steam iron.

I work for company called Groupe seb Korea, French company in Korea.

>> I work at Group Seb Korea which is a French company based in Korea.

When I was young, I like to become the business career woman and had fantacy about successful women who runs the business.

>> When I was young, I always wanted to become a businesswoman. I also dreamed/fantasize of being successful.

that is the reason why i applied for the business administration major and truely enjoyed my college student life.

>> That is the reason why I majored in Business Administration. I enjoyed my life as a college student.

thanks to my interest of learning English and being exposed to many foreigners, I would become working in Foreigner company.

>> I\'m thankful for being able to learn English and being exposed to many foreigners because I end up working in a foreign company.

I started to work in Markeing team and i found myself being excited as a Marketer because this job has lots of responsibility compared to other department.

>> I started to work with the Marketing Team and I found myself excited as a marketer because this job has lots of responsibilities compared to other department.

Thus, this department and this fact is really attractive for me because everything is up to my performance and I can see the result right away by the sales with number.

>> What I like in my department is that I can see the result of my performance right away by looking at the number of sales.

sometimes it burdens me, but I am really proud of my job.

>> Sometimes, it burdens me but I am really proud of my job.

I will try my best for becoming a competent marketer in the future. 

>> I will try my best to become a competent marketer in the future.

>> I will try my best in becoming a competent marketer in the future.