My childhood (0504)
학생이 쓴 원문
I was born as the first dauter of my parents. And I have three sisters.
My mother is a pharmacist who worked at her pharmacy in my town. I offen played there. Many neighborhood came to my mother and concerned us. It was good but loaned me because it made me think and behave unfreely. My parents respected us. They rarely scolded us. But I think that I felt I must meet their expectation rather than follow my own mind. I'm a pharmacist now but I sometimes think how about having done other job instead of a pharmacist. I don't know the way I hadn't go.
My parents didn't give strong message but always showed kindness and harmony with people. I think that it was their more strong message given to us. Another message was abandoning greed every situation.
They always want that we are stable and happy as all other parents do.
강사 첨삭
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>>I am the first daughter and I have 3 sisters.
My mother is a pharmacist who worked at her pharmacy in my town.
My mother is a pharmacist who worked at her pharmacy in my town.
>>My mother is a pharmacist works in a pharmacy in my town.
I offen played there.
>>I often play there.
Many neighborhood came to my mother and concerned us.
>>Many of our neighbors came to my mother and showed concern to us.
It was good but loaned me because it made me think and behave unfreely.
>>It was good but I felt uncomfortable because I have to behave and I cannot do the things that I want.
My parents respected us.
>>correct
They rarely scolded us.
>>correct
But I think that I felt I must meet their expectation rather than follow my own mind.
>>But I think I must meet their expectation rather than following my decision.
I\'m a pharmacist now but I sometimes think how about having done other job instead of a pharmacist.
>>I\'m a pharmacist now but sometimes I am thinking of trying other jobs.
I don\'t know the way I hadn\'t go.
>>I don\'t know how it feels to have another job.
My parents didn\'t give strong message but always showed kindness and harmony with people.
My parents didn\'t give strong message but always showed kindness and harmony with people.
>>My parents didn\'t give powerful messages but they always show kindness to other people.
Another message was abandoning greed every situation.
>>Another message was abandoning greed to every situation.
They always want that we are stable and happy as all other parents do.
They always want that we are stable and happy as all other parents do.
>>They always want us to be stable and happy as all other parents.
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