My childhood.

2017-11-20 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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Looking back on my life, I think the happiest moment in my life seems to be when I was a kid. I lived with my parents and elder sisters and there wasn't anything to worry about. Although my parents were busy running their own furniture factory, my sisters took good care of me. In my parents' factory, there were many animals such as dogs, cats, chickens, ducks and a turkey. Also, the mountain surrounded the factory so I could run around in nature all the time. There was no time to get board. I was a bright, cheerful, bold littly lady. The only thing that I had to think about was what I should do for fun with my sisters next. My sisters and I climbed up the mountain with dogs, rode a boat at the river whatever we want and at night, had a bonfire sitting around and eating baked sweet potato. We all married now so we couldn't live together anymore like before. That is why I miss those days of my childhood the most. The memories of the time will remain in my heart like precious treasures until I die.

강사 첨삭

It seems you had a great childhood [이름].

Those memories should be really treasured.

I also experienced those things with my sisters, well except for the boating thing. Haha!

Anyway, perhaps you are already on your way to the airport.

See you on Friday!

~Teacher Shanee^^,


Looking back on my life, I think the happiest moment in my life seems to be when I was a kid.

>>> Looking back, I think the happiest moment in my life seems to be when I was a kid.

I lived with my parents and elder sisters and there wasn\'t anything to worry about.

>>> Correct!

Although my parents were busy running their own furniture factory, my sisters took good care of me.

>>> Correct!

In my parents\' factory, there were many animals such as dogs, cats, chickens, ducks and a turkey.

>>> Correct!

Also, the mountain surrounded the factory so I could run around in nature all the time.

>>> Also, the factory was surrounded by mountains so I could run around the nature all the time.

There was no time to get board.

>>> There was no time to get bored.

I was a bright, cheerful, bold littly lady.

>>> I was a bright, cheerful and bold little lady.

The only thing that I had to think about was what I should do for fun with my sisters next.

>>> Correct!

My sisters and I climbed up the mountain with dogs, rode a boat at the river whatever we want and at night, had a bonfire sitting around and eating baked sweet potato.

>>>My sisters and I climbed up the mountain with our dogs, rode a boat at the river whenever we wanted, sat around a bonfire while eating sweet potatoes.

We all married now so we couldn\'t live together anymore like before.

>>> We are all married now so we can\'t live together like before anymore.

That is why I miss those days of my childhood the most.

>>> Correct!

The memories of the time will remain in my heart like precious treasures until I die.

>>> Correct!

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