My children ride ski the first time.
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My children are riding a ski the first time this weekend.
We bought ski boots, ski, helmet, jacket and google.
I worried about their safe.
Because my daughter is very young.
But she was very brave.
She could ride a ski alone. Fantastic.!!!
She took a lesson 2 times.
I want to 3 times.
But she was so tired.
My son took a lesson 3 times class.
So, He was well ski.
He was exiting.
I can take a snowboard.
I want to take a board. Bur it isn\'t.
because i take care of my children.
Next time....
I will take a snowboard.
강사 첨삭
My children are riding a ski the first time this weekend.
>> My children are going skiing for the first time this weekend.
We bought ski boots, ski, helmet, jacket and google.
>> We bought ski boots, skis, helmets, jackets, and goggles.
I worried about their safe. Because my daughter is very young. But she was very brave.
>> I\'m worried about their safety because my daughter is very young but she\'s very brave.
She could ride a ski alone. Fantastic.!!!
>> She could ski alone, it\'s fantastic!
She took a lesson 2 times.
>> She took ski lessons 2 times.
I want to 3 times. But she was so tired.
>> I wanted her to take it 3 times but she got tired.
My son took a lesson 3 times class. So, He was well ski.
>> My son took ski lessons 3 times so he is very good at skiing.
He was exiting.
>> He was so excited.
I can take a snowboard.
>> I can ride a snowboard.
I want to take a board. Bur it isn\'t. because i take care of my children.
>> I want to ride a snowboard but can\'t because I have to watch over my children.
Next time....I will take a snowboard.
>> Next time I will ride a snowboard.
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