My christmas

2010-12-29 · 첨삭 강사 Anne

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The concert place was the Jam-sil stadium. It has three stories. Our seat was located in the third floor. And the seats were pretty much precipituous. When my friend and I was jumpping, my friend stepped wrong. So, she fell down to the right in front seat of us. There was a child. Unfortunately, the child was fell down because of my friend. We were very sorry so we checked that she was fine many times. She smiled us and said she was ok. We relieved and enjoyed the concert again. The place was good since it was not very big and the staris which the seats were located were precipituous making us see them better. But it was dangerous so we needed to check many times where our feet were on the ground.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! I’m glad you enjoyed the place where you watched the concert. It was also a good thing that despite the fact that where you were located was dangerous, you still had fun. Always take care, [이름]! ^_^ My christmas >> My Christmas Day The concert place was the Jam-sil stadium. >> The concert place was named Jam-Sil stadium. It has three stories. >> It is a three-storey stadium. Our seat was located in the third floor. >> Our seat was located on the third floor. And the seats were pretty much precipituous. >> And the seats were pretty much precipitous. When my friend and I was jumpping, my friend stepped wrong. >> When my friend and I were jumping, she landed the wrong way. So, she fell down to the right in front seat of us. >> So she fell on the right side of our seats. There was a child. >> Correct Unfortunately, the child was fell down because of my friend. >> Unfortunately, the child also fell on her place because of my friend. We were very sorry so we checked that she was fine many times. >> We were very sorry and we always checked on her if he was ok. She smiled us and said she was ok. >> She smiled at us and said she was ok. We relieved and enjoyed the concert again. >> We were relieved and enjoyed the concert. The place was good since it was not very big and the staris which the seats were located were precipituous making us see them better. >> The place was nice since it was not very big and the stairs were precipitous making us see the performers better. But it was dangerous so we needed to check many times where our feet were on the ground. >> But it was also dangerous so we needed to be cautious.

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